Fusion #1 Page 4

29th Aug 2011, 5:31 AM in Welcome to My Life
Fusion #1 Page 4
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EssayBee 29th Aug 2011, 5:31 AM
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Did I mention that this first issue is too wordy? As evidence of this claim, I put before you Exhibit A: page 4. The page is packed with pretty much all the information you need for these characters (for the time being) and is probably an artifact of my prior prose-writing experience. This is the most text-heavy page of the series (granted there are still many examples of wordiness to come) and is something I've tried to avoid repeating.

As an in-story defense for all the text, the novelty of her first voice-over narration still hasn't worn off for Savunn, so she's prattling on (well, prattling more than usual) in her excitement.