Fusion #1 Page 4

29th Aug 2011, 5:31 AM in Welcome to My Life
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Fusion #1 Page 4
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EssayBee 29th Aug 2011, 5:31 AM edit delete
EssayBee
Did I mention that this first issue is too wordy? As evidence of this claim, I put before you Exhibit A: page 4. The page is packed with pretty much all the information you need for these characters (for the time being) and is probably an artifact of my prior prose-writing experience. This is the most text-heavy page of the series (granted there are still many examples of wordiness to come) and is something I've tried to avoid repeating.

As an in-story defense for all the text, the novelty of her first voice-over narration still hasn't worn off for Savunn, so she's prattling on (well, prattling more than usual) in her excitement.

Comments:

ironchef40 29th Aug 2011, 7:10 AM edit delete reply
ironchef40
Your stuff continues to be ace. Left DD too due to major glitches. Faved and will continue to read this.
Greenknightfury 30th Dec 2015, 1:49 AM edit delete reply
First found this on DD and loved it! Glad I was finally able to find it! BTW, is it just me or does Harold look like Harry Osborn?
EssayBee 30th Dec 2015, 10:39 AM edit delete reply
EssayBee
Greenknightfury--The Osborn likeness is coincidental, even though I now see all sorts of similarities (looks, both are best friends with the hero, etc.). I didn't have Harry in mind, but partway into this issue I did notice it. The intentional nod in Harold's design is his yellow and black shirt--it's Charlie Brown inspired (ya know, the lovable loser type).
Greenknightfury 30th Dec 2015, 1:46 PM edit delete reply
I figured it was unintentional, one of those times when comics you've read sneak into your own work unnoticed.
Siren 8th Feb 2019, 6:30 PM edit delete reply
Well if you're looking for a line to cut, I'd start with the "I lose geek points just for being a girl." That's a bit condescending and ruins the the suspension of disbelief since only a guy would think that (and even then, most real geek guys aren't like that in my experience).
EssayBee 19th Feb 2019, 1:12 PM edit delete reply
EssayBee
You comment about geeks is an indication of Fusion showing its age. Ten years ago (when this issue first published), comics and comic geekdom weren't as mainstream and "cool" as they are today. (This was only a year after The Dark Knight and Iron Man--thus, before the MCU officially kicked into gear.) Yes, there were popular superhero movies, but they didn't dominate the box office or pervade pop culture like they do today. (Although perceptions of superheroes were beginning to change around this time.) Plus, Fusion's in a different universe from us!